Fantastic Voyage - Pitch Presentation 17.03.15


  1. Hi Becky,

    It was a real shame not to see you at the pitch :( I'm going to offer up some feedback here, though understand that I can only react to what I 'think' you're intending as expressed by your pitch document. I'm unsure if you're actually 'game-ifying' the cycle of the hookworm (i.e. designing a game idea) or taking on gaming aesthetics in terms of creating an animation. The idea of using the horror/survival game genre as art direction does seem particularly suitable in terms of the horrors of the hookworm, and I think I understand it right that we'd be seeing it all from a sort of 'first person shooter' point of view.

    I think the issues to be wary of are those concerning the ways in which the game metaphor might eclipse or exclude the actual content of the cycle; I can absolutely understand why 'crystals' as opposed to 'poop' might be a more aesthetic asset in terms of design, but unless you communicate to the viewer that the crystals = poop, then you run the risk of 'not' informing your audience in terms of the actual facts of the cycle. This goes for all the substitutions you're thinking of making re. depicting the various inner spaces of the body; if you push the metaphor too far, you might simply be making an animation about an abstract monster in an otherwise abstract world.

    The other issue re. the first person shooter, is that it rather suggests that you can 'destroy' hookworms - or that your job is to enter this environment and kill them off. It would make sense then, if the 'first person shooter' represented the medication that kills them off - so we first witness the cycle, but then we're sent in to seek out and destroy. This idea of combating the cycle for me makes logical sense of choosing this particular genre of game by which to re-frame the cycle. I've included the names of the medication below if you're up for a bit more research.

    "Mebendazole is a common anti-worm medication that destroys parasites such as hookworm, roundworm, pin worm and whip worm in humans.

    Albendazole is another common hookworm treatment prescribed by doctors. Hookworm infection is 100 percent curable. If left untreated, it can cause serious problems like anemia in younger children and the elderly."

    Drop me an email at pgomm@ucreative.ac.uk and let me know how things are shaping up - both project-wise, and more generally.

  2. Not sure, if I can make any comments - I think the idea of something dark is nice, but I would like to see a bit of the animatic.

  3. "Roll up! Roll up! It's the Tombola Of Dreams!"